We have 99 words to add on any word of our choice. I chose Bach.
She slowly dried her eyes. She wondered why the tears
still hurt. She was used to his need of humiliating her in front of his friends
and family. Was she not worth any respect or care? She tried to remember the
good times. She could not let the bitterness invade. He was so good in many other
ways but he seemed impervious to her pain.
The door opened and
he glided in. He sat near her. Her eyes searched for remorse. His mouth came down hard on her lips. She
retched within and drowned herself in the Bach crescendo.
This depicts a lifetime of story in 99 words. Very well done!
ReplyDeleteNow I think I could have done it better but wanted to get it out there fast.
DeleteThank u so much for reading and encouraging me so.
I liked this.
ReplyDeleteI knew this feeling a lifetime ago, knew this man in a host of other men.
sometimes the drowning is what eventually heals and saves you.
Well written!
Yes, I believe so too. Thank u for reading and liking it :-) You are amazingly talented.
DeleteThat last line is poetic. What a scene you've set!
ReplyDeleteJoyful that you enjoyed it :-)
DeleteI feel for her. That is an awful situation to be in. One day she may have to think about whether all of the good things outweigh his hurtful behavior.
ReplyDeleteYes, that's true. Cannot neglect hurt for ever. Thank u for dropping by Janna and Congrats on ur win !
DeleteSo terrible when you know what's wrong but can do nothing about it.
ReplyDeleteYes, its sad when you can't really do anything.
DeleteOh, painful. I hope the music lifts her up - and that he doesn't ruin Bach for her.
ReplyDeleteYes, the music works like a local anesthetic. Thanks for dropping by Christine.
Delete"He was so good in many other ways"
ReplyDeleteThis resonated with me. Such a typical thing for a woman stuck in an unhealthy relationship to utter. You captured the internal struggle well. Hopefully she'll find the strength to move on soon.
Thank u for reading Ivy. I hope she moves on too.
DeleteAh,such a sad life! oh why are human beings,specially us women,such emotional fools!A hard hitting snapshot of real life Sini-very well written-as always:-)
ReplyDeleteThank u Atreyee for ur kind words. I like ur profile picture, such a full smile.
DeleteWhy do we always want the ones that hurt us? Thanks for being a part of our big 99th!
ReplyDeleteThanks Trifecta for being there. Its a feeling that I cherish, to be able to run and enter the Trifecta gates and look in awe at all these amazing blooms of written word.
DeleteReally beautiful, Sini. I love drowning in Bach...!
ReplyDeleteThank u Anita :-)
DeleteYou visited a place I never want to go, and did so in a fashion believable enough as to reinforce my notion. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThank u Troy. I do hope u go to beautiful places :-)
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